First off, you already know some of my thoughts on this, and you are so brilliant, this fic is just so painful - it's so good because it's actually heartbreaking.
“We need to be more naked,” Aiba announces, as though he’s just realized this crisis.
In the back of his head, Jun hears Sho’s laugh.
That line just comes in right when a sense of stability and relief is starting to creep back in and it's like a knife to the heart, really. You are so good with words, at choosing just the right words to make your reader feel.
“When we slept together, do you remember-”
“You’d say ‘Goodnight, everyone, I love you,’” Jun interrupts, squeezing Aiba closer as though he might disappear.
THIS IS WHERE I STARTED CRYING AGAIN. ;______________;
Did they all think that sleeping together transformed them into people who hadn’t watched each other grow up? Sho could never really forget Jun being young and awkward and in love with him, and when he finally let Jun fuck him it was completely surreal. He couldn’t understand how Nino, the same kid who used to lick Sho’s food if he wanted it for himself, could possibly share Ohno.
Yes yes yes, this is perfect - so much of Sho's thoughts, his fears, his desperation - and this whole paragraph is just so - argh. It makes me shiver. And then that last line makes me laugh and it's a huge emotional mess.
This is such a good fic, it's one of those fics - like most of yours - that I want to turn over slowly in my mind, to read over again and again and re-experience. ♥
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“We need to be more naked,” Aiba announces, as though he’s just realized this crisis.
In the back of his head, Jun hears Sho’s laugh.
That line just comes in right when a sense of stability and relief is starting to creep back in and it's like a knife to the heart, really. You are so good with words, at choosing just the right words to make your reader feel.
“When we slept together, do you remember-”
“You’d say ‘Goodnight, everyone, I love you,’” Jun interrupts, squeezing Aiba closer as though he might disappear.
THIS IS WHERE I STARTED CRYING AGAIN. ;______________;
Did they all think that sleeping together transformed them into people who hadn’t watched each other grow up? Sho could never really forget Jun being young and awkward and in love with him, and when he finally let Jun fuck him it was completely surreal. He couldn’t understand how Nino, the same kid who used to lick Sho’s food if he wanted it for himself, could possibly share Ohno.
Yes yes yes, this is perfect - so much of Sho's thoughts, his fears, his desperation - and this whole paragraph is just so - argh. It makes me shiver. And then that last line makes me laugh and it's a huge emotional mess.
This is such a good fic, it's one of those fics - like most of yours - that I want to turn over slowly in my mind, to read over again and again and re-experience. ♥